The intention of publishing the feedback below is so that all students can benefit by understanding the strengths and weakness’ of a range of projects. Please take the time to review other students work with these comments in mind. If you have any questions or would like any further clarification don’t hesitate to ask me during the studio session
Lorayne Bejjani
Key strength of the scheme:
The underground space is well resolved with the stair appearing as a pile of rock growing up to the exhibition space. Your use of textures in the above ground studio is well thought out to give the flat surfaces a degree of expression while still providing as interesting contrast with the wave form
Most significant weakness of the scheme:
Animations are poorly cropped, being viewed from to far away, and are fly arounds for the most part showing little of the interior spaces
Jaryd Carolin
Key strength of the scheme:
Good wholistic approach to design where each stage developed layers of meaning to the scheme and excellent use of the blog to provide an understanding of this process.
The animation narrative was an interesting idea that separated the presentation from the more conventional submissions
Most significant weakness of the scheme:
The early stages of design that focused on objects (masking tape and grenade) may have limited the scheme from becoming more expressive and free. The exhibition space as a space that links the above and below ground spaces could have been better resolved
Wei Heng Chin
Key strength of the scheme:
A series of very successful stairs and spatial arrangements, particularly the exhibition space and its relationship to the studio spaces
Most significant weakness of the scheme:
The size of the scheme, while helping to create some interesting spaces and complexities, has also left some large unresolved areas that could have become more compact in a smaller scheme more suited to individual studio spaces
Ryan Dharmansyah
Key strength of the scheme:
The applied textures work well to break up what are essentially rectilinear interiors. There are the beginnings of good ideas in the underground space in the relationship between the ‘dark’ theme and the hexagonal side lights
Most significant weakness of the scheme:
The scheme has little relationship to the original ideas. ‘Man’ being represented as a ‘straight thing’ is simplistic and misses an opportunity to develop what were quite rich and interesting sections.
Sre Gnanamurthy
Key strength of the scheme:
Composition of overlapping studio space is quite successful and well demonstrated in your animations. The animations work quite well in terms of what is shown and the music to accompany them.
Most significant weakness of the scheme:
Exhibition space is not resolved to the same level as the other spaces, nor is it integrated with the scheme as a whole. The underground space could have been more successfully demonstrated in the images and animations
Max Hu
Key strength of the scheme:
Clear development from section to model producing a successful ‘embracing’ space, despite still having a slightly awkward stair entry. The ideas of shifting and embracing are extremely well demonstrated through the animations
Most significant weakness of the scheme:
Above ground studio is a 3d space created from extruding your 2d section. The idea of shifting could have been taken further and into 3 dimensions
Nazrul Islam
Key strength of the scheme:
Overall development of the scheme shows promising signs and it has come a long way from the sections you attempted in the first class
Most significant weakness of the scheme:
The building produced still shows little relationship with the themes of ‘looking’ and ‘timber’ apart from simplistic forms and material applications. The scale change between the above and below ground studios is a major oversight
Nik Kardum
Key strength of the scheme:
An extremely accomplished overall scheme and model that shows a clear development from the section drawings into a 3d form
Most significant weakness of the scheme:
As you have identified, the separation of your design into clear levels has perhaps limited the creativity and fluidity of the design process. As Menis said, it has moved away from what was quite a free expressive section into a rigid and structured scheme
Michelle Lee
Key strength of the scheme:
Good evidence of development from sketch through to model and a successful exhibition space to link two very different studio spaces
Most significant weakness of the scheme:
The above ground stairs (repeating) lack the richness that the other stairs and spaces have and the below ground space could have been developed further beyond what is essentially a 2d section extruded to produce a 3d space.
On a technical level, the model images and animations are of poor resolution – possibly a limitation of your computer screen size?
Nicole Meo
Key strength of the scheme:
Good development of exhibition space to link the 2 studios successfully. The form and the stairs of the above ground studio are well designed in relation to separating and the animations have been well thought out to demonstrate these ideas
Most significant weakness of the scheme:
Interior studio spaces are not as successful as the overall form. Spectrum is a fairly standard rectilinear space and separated produces a slightly awkward studio space
Phil Nguyen
Key strength of the scheme:
Unique approach to the datum line and the resolution of an underground space to suit the ‘fantasy’ theme quite well.
Most significant weakness of the scheme:
Overall scale is a bit overwhelming and while I appreciate there are good reasons for the shape and size of the underground space, it could have become a bit more refined and suited for an individuals studio.
Yu Qi
Key strength of the scheme:
Underground ‘wonder’ space has great ideas on how the space works and is experienced through changing lighting conditions and materiality. The interrupting stairs have been well developed and are quite successful
Most significant weakness of the scheme:
Interrupt space doesn’t have an identity of its own. It seems linked to the exhibition space for no clear reason. The idea of interrupting could have been taken further to produce a studio like the wonder studio, that is connected to the exhibition space but also achieves separation
Jennifer Salcedo
Key strength of the scheme:
Integration of the exhibition space with the overall design is achieved simply and successfully. Animations also capture the ideas (fading especially) of the scheme quite well
Most significant weakness of the scheme:
Above studio (metal) is a bit separated from the user which the suspended walkway seems to confirm. The bubble shapes could have been integrated more into the use and experience of the space
Prateek Shorey
Key strength of the scheme:
Good ideas on the below ground space and how the stairs are created from the artists process
Most significant weakness of the scheme:
The below ground studio has dictated the from of the rest of the scheme which has created an exhibition space that is a large extrusion of the below ground floor plan that has little relationship to the artworks produced.
The presentation of your sections and textures is terrible. Don’t edit them to remove the colour as they also lose the finer details and their appeal as hand drawn sketches
Kevin Tanuwidjaja
Key strength of the scheme:
Your ideas from the section drawing were quite promising and your expression space shows good development throughout the experiment. The stairs show potential and are a good attempt but are left unresolved
Most significant weakness of the scheme:
The ‘happy’ studio is a simplistic and not very successful attempt to develop the section into a 3d space. Combining the ‘expression’ studio with the ‘dark’ texture to produce a gloomy and monotonous space seems to contradict the initial ‘expression’ idea
Saffat Waes
Key strength of the scheme:
The grasp idea works well and produces a well balanced composition. This balance between the suspended circle and the pear shaped supports produces spaces that challenge the occupant and create a sense of unease
Most significant weakness of the scheme:
The scheme created from extruding your 2d section is a simplistic way to produce 3d space. Despite some good grasp ideas the stairs are rather standard and unrelated to the overall scheme. The underground ‘zest’ space is underdeveloped
Simon Yaghoubpour
Key strength of the scheme:
Animations are good. They show some interesting spatial arrangements in what is ultimately a simple design
Most significant weakness of the scheme:
As you have identified on your blog the rectilinear shapes have little or no relationship with your sections or words. There is little consideration of how the artists work within the spaces
Ying Zhang
Key strength of the scheme:
The development of the twisting space to consider its use and occupation is very good. The above ground studio is also successful in the way it brings together a number of elements to produce a ‘union’ of parts
Most significant weakness of the scheme:
The exhibition space doesn’t have the same level of resolution the studio spaces have. It could have been developed further to link the twisting space with the union space. The absence of your words and accompanying art works from your blog is a missed submission requirement
Matraville Library, Year2, Semester2
14 years ago
